Tuesday

Spring Haiku

Over yonder the
Groundhog spots his own shadow
Spring will have to wait

Over yonder the
Groundhog spots his own shadow
Spring will have to wait

I had trouble getting the first and last lines to conform to haiku structure, but I think it came out all right.
little unhappy with the third line though, I couldn't find a way to express sadness in spring being post poned. so the third line sort of echoes the second and feels redundent.

EDIT: I found a way to end this poem in a way that I like better.

over yonder the
groundhog spots his own shadow -
lilies softly weep

over yonder the
groundhog spots his own shadow -
lilies softly weep

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